Second Draft Of Script

Monday

INT: Adams room

Adam gets out of bed on the left side and steps into old pizza, then heads to the bathroom

ADAM

(under his breath)

Great

INT: Louise’s room

Louise gets out of bed, putting her feet into fluffy slippers and heads to the bathroom

LOUISE

Mmm

INT: Adams kitchen

Adam is making toast and it gets burnt

INT:  Louise’s kitchen

Louise is making toast and it comes out perfectly looking Scrumptious

EXT: On the street

Tuesday

Adam is walking to Sixth Form and as he puts his oyster in his pocket and the £10 falls out

EXT: On the street

Louise is also walking down the street and finds £10, looks around and then puts it in her pocket grinning

Ellipse of time

INT: corridor in school

Louise is loudly messing about with her friends. They get bored and walk off. Adam arrives on his way walking to lesson and his teacher abruptly stops him telling in off giving him a white slip

AMBIENT SOUNDS OF CONVERSATION

TEACHER

Why are you making so much noise?

ADAM

Sir, it wasn’t me

TEACHER

Well, I don’t care, what are you doing anyway? You should be in lessons

ADAM

Sir I have –

TEACHER

Do your top button up and where’s your blazer? You know what… white slip!

Wednesday

INT: Library

Louise goes to pick up a book for her English essay, gets it and leaves, Adam arrives to borrow the same book and asks the librarian who tells him its out of stock.

LOUISE

Humming Sounds

ADAM

Excuse me, I was wondering if you had ___________, I need if for an essay due tomorrow

LIBRARIAN

Let me just check, if you could follow me

ADAM

Thanks

LIBRARIAN

Well, as you can see, the book is now out of stock, sorry for any inconvenience, and good luck with your essay

ADAM

*sighs* & *mumbles under breath* - Yeah Thanks

Friday

Adam is on his way home, walking to the train station and he runs to get his train but just misses it. As he waits for another train in frustration, Louise arrives on the same platform that he’s on. Their train comes, he lets her onto the carriage first and they begin to chat as they both sit down.

Commentary of the Script

We have tried to limit the amount of dialogue and speech for the characters throughout the short film as short films tend to be more visual with not much dialogue or talking. This makes it more interesting, creative and clearer for the audience especially was we are using basic cameras and the sound of the dialogue wouldn't be very clear. We have used a variety of different locations to make the film more diverse and interesting instead of the whole thing being filmed in one location. We have chosen very realistic locations that we are able to film in without being restricted eg if we filmed in a public place like a shop then we would need to get permission as we wouldnt be able to just turn up and start filming. We have chosen to film in school and around school for convenience and because its a reliable location.